Some people say that the best way to improve the overall general health of the public is to offer more sports facilities. Others say that this would have little effect and other measure are necessary to improve public health. Discuss both views.

Health
is the most important factor in our everyday routine. Many governments of different parts of the world, play a vital role to make improve public
health
in
society
. Some people arguing, the best way to improve public
health
is by growing the amount of physical sports
facilities
.
On the other hand
, some are suggesting that required improving on the other factors in order to make general well-being of the
society
.
This
essay will explore both views and
then
will suggest one of the best strategies to increase
health
indicators.
First
of all, some people believed the best option is
improve
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sports
facilities
. I am completely disagreeing with that. Nowadays, especially, consider to the developing countries are faced by the number of issues,
such
as infection, pollution, unemployment, the poverty people, poor hygiene of the
society
, lack of foods and water, etc… The government should improve the basic requirements of the
society
rather than
sport
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sports
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facilities
. For
instant
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, a poor person could not be able to meet basic needs like
the
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shelter,
foods
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or hygiene activities.
Hence
, improvement of the
sport
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sports
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facilities
could support with them to increase by their private well-being.
However
, the government should enhance their quality of life, make new opportunities, and establish new rules, policies and regulations to improve the
health
compared with the sports
facilities
.
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