In some countries , children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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it is believed that if children work hard enough they can attain everything . In
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To begin
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may inspire them to be academically active and target bigger things in
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future .
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it can plant
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thought of achieving anything in life if
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amount of work and time is given .
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it creates positivity which helps to enhance a child’s dedication towards something .
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during my infant
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my parents used to set me
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to unlock anything .
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parents may only use
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academically active excluding
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everything else .
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this
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bit of luck and not only
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children who
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being able to give
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amount of effort may feel depressed due to
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in some
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parents use these lines to make sure their kids are being more active in only education . In conclusion , there are both benefits and drawbacks . As for a
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it will motivate and inspire them to
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where the advantages will
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the disadvantages
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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