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In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents' home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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In a vast number of countries across globe young individuals choose to leave their parents' home after schooling and start their personal living arrangements with their near and dears ,
this
 kind of trend has mixed effects, in my opinion, depending on the person and circumstances under which one decides to leave the above-mentioned arrangements,I am going to discuss both sides of the issue in
this
 essay. As described above at present, trending in the youth of leaving parents' home as soon as they reach adulthood and starting their own arrangements as they want to establish their own world and abilities of sustainability, it seems positive for them. On the other ,hand it starts building stress of financial and other liabilities as now they need to manage everything from bread to rent of house individually and no support available,so now their focus gets divided in the number of direction rather than only focusing on the carrier and
further
 studies. some of them fall in the wrong company of friends who indulge in drug and alcohol abuse and don't have respect for law and order which in long run gives big troubles and in some cases ruins their
life
 completely. On the other ,
hand some
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 with long vision and a team of like-minded friends support and encourage each other in a difficult time of transition and start establishing their own small world of existence day by day and lead their way to professional and personal
life
 reaching a peak of their carrier.some of
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 balance between part-time jobs and studies nicely and use available government support resources intellectually shaping their way of success. In ,conclusion living in parents' house and starting own
life
 is a big decision and everyone should exercise their own decision-making skills by using the consultation services available and weighing all pros and con's so they have a better
life
.
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