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some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it Is a waste of valuable money. what is your opinion?

#people #money #species #waste
People have and will always continue to debate the particular idea on the protection of endangered species.
However
, I feel that there is a need for the protection of the species. The very fact of life is to add value to others. In
this
 case adding value will simply mean to nurture,
to
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encourage and
to
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ensure life is saved. Today, Indian
tigers
 are on the verge of getting wipe out from
this
 planet. Spending money will make sure there still is ecology and will allow the
tigers
 to continue living on the planet.
Tigers
 are wild animals and need to live in their natural habitat of the jungle. For the Jungle to remain safe and sound, the rangers and other helpers in the forest must provide safety to the
tigers
 with new policy implementations that ensure a large amount of fine's and life Imprisonment if caught killing or hurting the tiger. The money spent in creating
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better growth for the
tigers
 can be recovered by promoting tourism in the particular state. If guided tours are arranged and the locations of these endangered wild
cat
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 are understood by the rangers an entire business can be not only created but
also
 be
self sustained
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