In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals as food or other products. such as medicines and clothing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Technology is going very vast but still in
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modern era, everything is not possible with the advancement. It is said that devils or some other objects that are used for medical, food and wearing products are not essential these days. I do not agree with
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argument and
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will extend my points in the following paragraphs. It is commonly understood that for living life, everything is necessary whether it is related to technology or nature.
Human
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has been
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taken many benefits from
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and
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other products like trees.
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, fruit plants, vegetable plants and
animals
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help us to breathe and to eat which is a crucial part of every individual. Not only for humans but
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for the beasts, because it is like a food chain,
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, a rat is eaten by a cat, the cat is caught by a dog,
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dog is food for another animal
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as
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or tiger and people are used these
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for eating or another making things ,
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, shoes, clothes, playing things and healing objects
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, plants always help us to produce different kinds of medicines which are used to procure humans,
animals
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and even trees as well.
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, tree leaves are assisted
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clothes to relax in different weather.
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,
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wastage
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and their bodies are always used to create different homoeopathic medicines that are
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useful for procurement.
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, sheep
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very helpful
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in making
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woollen products and toys as well for kids. In conclusion, no doubt advancement has been a crucial part
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nowadays,
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, technology cannot provide the all necessary things that
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for human activity in daily routine. Everything has its own importance.

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