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Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts, and that this money could be spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

#people #government #money #arts
Some people argue that
government
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the government
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 is misusing the
government
funds
 on the
arts
 and they should use the
funds
 to invest
some
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in some
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 other areas.
This
 essay totally agrees with that statement. I believe that
government
 should invest
funds
on
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in
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 roads and transport which will benefit people more than using the
funds
 on the
arts
 which does not offer much revenue, social and economic benefits . The economy needs reliable infrastructure to connect supply chains and efficiently move goods and services across borders. Infrastructure connects households across metropolitan areas to higher quality opportunities for employment, healthcare and education. In Australia,
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the governement
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governement
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government
 has
spend
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spent
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 billions on infrastructure projects,
such
 as WestConnex and Sydney Metro which has created lots of opportunities for employment and
less
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fewer
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 time people spend commuting since Sydney Metro starts running.
On the other hand
, art is imagination and it is not real.
Government
 investment in the
arts
,
such
 as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Art itself does not offer much revenue, social and economic benefits. In Australia,
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the governement
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governement
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government
 has spent billions on the Crown theatre project in
Melboune
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Melbourne
. The project was taken 5 years to finish. After the project finished, many local residents
complaint
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complained
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 about the noise due to part of the theatre is an open stage. In conclusion,
government
 investment in the
arts
 is a waste of meoney; it does not offer much revenue, social and economic benefits whereas
government
 should invest
funds
 on roads and transport which provides opportunities for employment, healthcare and education.
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