Advances in science and technology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better lime to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people think that science development throughout over 100 years

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helped us to keep

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and jobs to foster the country economy without concerning about health issues.

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, scientists found out

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sources to improve human

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, social development caused air pollution and water contamination in

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perspective. To sum up, there is no denying the fact that industrial advance brings to human interesting experiences

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in the past. In my opinion, I believed that our

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