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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A number of people think that's
governments
 should make some kind of threshold for maximum earning per
person
. On the other side, some believed completely opposite it.
Firstly
, everyone in today's world makes their profit or earning by themself. so it is not ideal to think about someone
involvement
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 in a specific personal financial situation. If some specific
person
 takes high salaries
then
 they pay more tax as compare to low wage earners. The best example is Microsoft CEO Satya Nandale is getting high salary than the common
person
 but he
also
 pays more taxes that's make rise government income, so
then
 they spend those taxes on some other developments. On the other side, some narrow mind people completely ignore some benefits and think on the opposite side. If government make some fixed level of income that's demotivating young generation as well as they become lazier toward their works and never gives more interest in the future goals. The best relevant example is New Zealand
governments
 made some salary threshold for government employees like nurses, police now they not able to get more than $60000 per year. Which already
started
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 demotivate their employees and some of them already left that jobs. In conclusion, my view strongly supports
with
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the
first
 statement.
Governments
 do not have the right to interfere with someone success or financial matters. If a
person
 earns more money
then
 the
governments
 make more money than a simple line of understanding.
However
,
governments
 have to encourage their citizens to make more money through hard work or smart work.
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  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
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  • innovate
  • government intervention
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