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Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.

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Some part of
people
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consider
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, that they can make a
noise
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 as much as they want, while others think differently. In my
opinion
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 both
point
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points
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 of
views
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 have the right aspects. If we talk about
people
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 from the
first
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 group, we must add that not all
people
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 are pleased to hear very loud
noise
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 in public
places
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. Those
people
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 need to make noises in special
places
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 in which
noise
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 will not interfere with
people
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 working or doing something else. Making
noise
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 in
such
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places
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like
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 school or office interrupt from working either studying, so
noise
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 is suitable only in permitted
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Second
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 group of
people
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 is right too because now every
second
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 person is intolerant to
noise
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.
Noise
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 slows down the progress of cases in any industry, so
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it
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in
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it
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 must be controlled in workplaces but not in entertainment
places
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. I agree
noise
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 is very annoying sometimes but when it comes to entertainment
noise
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 make
situation
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the situation
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 better.
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, in a park, the
noise
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 emanating from
people
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 creates a cheerful atmosphere and it is already difficult to imagine its absence. In conclusion,
noise
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 might be good and bad. The main thing is to make
noise
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 in the right place and in some
places
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 it is better to keep the
noise
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 with you

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