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Some people believe that traveling is a valuable experience ;others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some
people
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 think that
traveling
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 is a good way to get a great experience.
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, other
people
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 think that
this
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 is a useless pastime and
waste
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a waste
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money
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of money
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.
This
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 essay will discuss
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both opinions.
To begin
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 with, some
people
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 think that
making
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 a trip you can get a lot of knowledge along with entertainment.
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, many tourists will agree that
traveling
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 helps them relax, at the same
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 improve themselves.
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, many of my friends who have visited other
countries
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 for a long
time
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 tell me they have learned a lot of good things about their mentality,traditions and how they had a good
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.
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, we can understand why, in their opinion, travel is good.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 say that a trip is a big expense for transportation and the
time
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 and
money
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that is
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 spent makes
traveling
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 an invaluable occupation.
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, many
people
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 sacrifice
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money
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 for the sake of travel and
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 is critical for some
people
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.
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,
people
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 from European
countries
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 can afford to travel to other
countries
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, but more than 95
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per cent
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 of
people
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 from poor
countries
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 cannot afford it.So many of them believe that the trip is a waste of
money
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 and
time
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. In conclusion, I agree that
traveling
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travelling
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 is a great way to gain experience and self-development,and learn about the culture of other
countries
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.
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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