Some people believe that traveling is a valuable experience ;others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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agrees that going to
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on the holiday give more experience to
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another part of humanity believe that it
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not good side on
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and it just associated with spending money and wasting
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essay will discuss these two arguments. Basically, it is often said that the majority of information
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found at the
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of travelling, which nowadays
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as a fact and as an argument.
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, many
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history found new information associated with culture and climate when they have a trip and
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the final, some of them became famous
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. Likely, it means that during the travelling
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can learn to speak in
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can get to know about the culture, history of the country, that it replenishes knowledge.
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, the famous Christopher Columbus discovers new facts and wrote many books when he travels around the world. Anyway, nobody
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that the trip needs so
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money in order to travel and it is obvious that journey gets
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of your
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. Many social factors lead to waste
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on emptiness like spending
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traffic
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. To sum up, I personally believe that travelling is
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possibility for
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to develop in
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and to become more knowledgeable, that it influences positively
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humanity.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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