In some countries an increasing number of people are soffering from health problem as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Several
people
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from some countries have suffered health
disseases
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diseases
disease
due to fast
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.
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goverments
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governments
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de poor quality
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among their citizens and the importance of creating laws over some
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specific
food
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.
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, I will give my opinion at the end of
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, when
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governments
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control
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junk
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the
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quality
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.
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make themselves active and
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energetic
. Several developed countries
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the
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control
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over the
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putting in them rating stars which provide information about the calories and grass inside the
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, including a little tax which is sent to the health department.
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kind of action let the
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think twice about buying some products and
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they will pay for other options more economic and healthier.
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, some
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goverments
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governments
do not have total
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over
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food
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because some big companies deny
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ban to reach their clients.
this
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situation
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when the privileges of earns over
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health are more important than the importance of good
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for the general public.
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, big companies like Mac Donald's has
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influence
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some
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goverments
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governments
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in developing countries because they cover all the
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industries in several cities, increasing the bad
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behaviour in the
people
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and selling their products cheaper than local
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. In my point of view,
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goverments
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governments
have
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influence
in
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the way how their citizens eat, putting high taxes will
incourage
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encourage
buyers to change their bad habits and giving some kind of
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in the
food
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industry to avoid the monopoly of big
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chains companies. The general society
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to eat more vegetables and healthy
food
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.
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,
people
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will live longer and happy than generations before.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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