Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is believed that
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main
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aim of travelling is to give
such
kind of experience and enjoyment that you will never have at home.
However
, it was clear that there is another type of group who believe that travelling is just
waste
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of
time
which you could spend on training and
waste
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a waste
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of money.
This
essay is going to discuss both
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of
views
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.
Travel
allows you to look at life through new lenses and possibly could give answers to our doubts and our concepts about the accustomed
way
of thinking. . I guess it is clear that
,
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travelling allows you to look at familiar and regular things in a completely different
way
.
For example
, each country has
his
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own history, traditions, customs and cuisines and the moment when you try something new, you actually realize how huge
this
world is. You understand that pleasure can be obtained not only through the Internet but
also
by activities and movements because
traveling
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to an unknown country is a great
way
to take yourself out of your comfort zone. As you
travel
, you will realize how little things could make huge afford to get truly happy.
On the other hand
, all of
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activities are nothing more than memory. Frankly, it is completely useless cause you could
fell
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something new
through
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another and more effective
way
. Which will have the greatest impact on you: a week-long trip to the African jungle or weekly walks in the nearby forest? Taking
time
to walk regularly will give you a stronger connection with nature than on a short trip
one
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.
Moreover
, we must admit that Travelling is a waste of
time
,
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because you spend a lot of
time
to go
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from
place
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one place
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to another, tickets are always expensive and if you
travel
without your family, you actually could
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. To conclude, I strongly believe that
traveling
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is the best
way
to get knowledge and experience.
However
, we need to admit that travelling is not cheap
one
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activity and for
this
pleasure and
experience
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,experience
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you will need
pay
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to pay
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. If you are rich,
then
you need to
travel
but either
way
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it would be better
stay
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to stay
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at home.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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