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Many people today are choosing to live and work in another country after graduating from university in their home country. Why is this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Migrating to another country after graduating from University is a phenomenon far from new.
However
, in recent years
this
 tendency has boosted considerably. While some nationalists claim is unfair to use the country´s education system and not give anything back to the community, I believe people should be free to choose where they want to settle and make a career. From the desire for new challenges to the pursuit of economic opportunities, there are several reasons why young graduates decide to start their careers abroad. Developed
countries
 like Australia or Canada, encourage the arrival of skilled professionals offering wealthy wages and excellent quality of life.
For instance
, engineers tend to be in high demand in those
countries
 and the income can be even 10 times what they would receive in Argentina or India. As a consequence, it does not sound crazy that qualified people choose to migrate after finishing their studies. There are
also
 some voices against
such
 behaviours, especially in
countries
 where University’s fees are mostly or entirely covered by the government. They claim that
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 what sociologists call the “human capital flight” is detrimental to their economy and unfair with the efforts made to provide
such
 an advanced education.
For example
, a teacher who received free and excellent training in Argentina could leave without giving anything back to the children of their own country.
Moreover
, if the majority of professionals migrate after finishing University, the country would experience a substantial decline in high skilled workers and the whole economy could collapse. Human capital flight is a phenomenon that deeply concerns some undeveloped
countries
, but even in the impossible hypothesis of a massive exodus of brains, everyone should be free to settle wherever they desire as long as they fulfil immigration regulations and requirements.
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