In some countries it is illegal to refuse people applying for jobs because of their age. Is it a positive or a negative development, in your opinion?

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Denying job opportunities on the basis of advanced

age

is considered a crime in few countries.

However

, in my opinion, it is a negative development because it can affect the overall progress of a nation.

This

essay will discuss in the

first

paragraph, how old

age

medical issues have an impact and in the

second

paragraph how familial responsibilities affect the working capacity of an employee.

Firstly

, as the

age

advances, a plethora of physical problems hampers the energy level of an individual.

People

in their old

age

suffer not only from hypertension, diabetes and joint pain but

also

from lack of concentration, memory impairment and lethargy.

Therefore

, work done by

such

employees most of the time hinders quality as well as punctuality in comparison with the youngsters.

In addition

to that, an employer may need to bear additional expenses on the health management of their elderly staff, probably more than younger ones. Resultantly financial loss happens, which

consequently

has a considerable negative impact on the economy of a community.

For instance

, a cooperative bank in my town called ' The Saraswat Bank', lately retired Mr Singh a 60 years old accountant because of his excess leaves due to fitness issues.

Secondly

, the life of the aged

people

is often multifaceted with owning responsibilities of family. Even though they are committed to their jobs, family problems, conflicts and responsible parenthood sometimes weaken them.

Moreover

, these

people

are more intrigued with social interaction and their image, which forces them to be available in social gatherings

such

as marriage and engagement parties.

As a result

life of elderly

people

is more complicated,

additionally

they are more distracted and indisciplined.

For example

, Mrs Deshpande in my neighbourhood usually works less than a year in one office because she was

then

dismissed by an employer due to intervention of her family commitments in her job.

Thus

this

results in a waste of time and money for the employers and eventually what gets hampered, is their progress. In conclusion, referring to the economical detrimental effect of appointing old

age

people

is an utterly negative development in my opinion.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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18Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

353 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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In some countries it is illegal to refuse people applying for jobs because of their age. Is it a positive or a negative development, in your opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extent do advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms in other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.