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In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?

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Currently is well know that a huge number of
people
 spends less
time
 with their
neighbours
 than they used to do in the previous generation. Actually, we can even do not know who they are. There are several reasons why citizens have reduced their relations with
neighbours
. For me, some elements could explain it.
To begin
 with,
people
 are extremely busy nowadays if we compare it with the past, we spend a lot of
time
 at work and in contact with our co-workers
instead
 of
neighbours
.
Moreover
, because of modern forms of communication, we have a large circle of friends with whom we are in touch
with
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only through social media. To reverse
this
 problem,
people
 should give a small gift to a new neighbour when they came to our area and introduce ourselves to them.
Also
, we should keep in touch with our
neighbours
 not only to discuss solutions to problems in the neighbourhood but
also
 to have
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leisure
time
 with them. Another cause for
this
 problem is that
people
 have been spending much
time
 inside their homes even on the weekends
,
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 since their habits of leisure activities have been changed. We prefer watching movies, series, playing video games
instead
 of doing outdoor activities. In order to solve
this
 issue and have better contact with ,
neighbours
people
 should go to social places
such
 as parks, gyms, and playgrounds for children in our neighbourhood because it can help us to strike up a friendship with them. In conclusion, losing the relationship with
neighbours
 would be a problem since when we have a closer relationship with them, we have the opportunity to build a sense of community in our neighbourhood as we used to do in the past.
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