There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

One of the major reasons for global warming is man-made activities.
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are cutting
trees
and producing
carbon
dioxide
. To solve these problems, humans have to
use
things
that are not harmful to the environment.
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causes
and
solution
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for
this
problem.
Firstly
, people cut
trees
to make papers and houses. Cutting
trees
will make the pollution bad
,
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because
trees
can incorporate
carbon
dioxide
and produce oxygen. If
this
does not happen the pollution and global warming will stop.
Secondly
, producing
carbon
dioxide
is another reason. Humans
use
cars
,
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and burn garbage and plastics. They cut
trees
, so plants cannot incorporate carbons and
this
causes
the world’s temperature to rise. To solve
this
problem people should not cut
trees
and produce
carbon
dioxide
, but
this
is difficult. Due to
this
,
use
things
that do not harm the environment and are useful in life.
For instance
, papers can be made from stones. It is waterproof and not easily ripped. If everyone starts to
use
this
paper made from stones, the environment does not have to be damaged and is very useful in daily life. The solution for
the
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carbon
dioxide
has two
things
.
First
,
for example
,
use
electric
cars
when travelling. Electric
cars
do not produce
carbon
dioxide
,
in
addition
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there are no problems with using oil. It moves by batteries.
Secondly
, stop wasting too much trash. Plastics can be reused and other
things
can be
also
reused.
For example
, donate clothes, toys and books to children who are living in developing countries. It is better to
use
than burnt and
causes
high temperature. In conclusion, the main two
causes
of temperature rising are damaging plants and producing
carbon
dioxide
.
On the other hand
,
this
can be solved by making papers from stones, using electric
cars
and recycling trash.
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