Nowadays young people have to make the decision about their future career. Some people, however, believe that teachers and parents can make a better choice for their future career. Discuss both options and include your opinion with relevant examples from your own experience.

every day
kid
human
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have to make the selection about their impending
occupation
. Some
people
,
however
, believe that
instructor
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in
addition
to my
father
and my
mother
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able to make the best
choice
for their
future
occupation
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. In
this
day and, most
people
tend to
view
things differently, even whether everyday
children
person
have to make the
decision
about their
future
occupation
. Some
people
,
however
,
believes
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that teachers
in
addition
my
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to my
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father
and my
mother
be able to make the best
choice
for their
future
occupation
. to some groups, they think that
children
person
have to make the
decision
about their impending
occupation
.
this
despite
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, it seems to me that, I still believe that
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the instructor
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instructor
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in
addition
my
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father
and my
mother
be able to make the best
choice
for their impending
occupation
. the following cases and examples will help support my point of
view
. First of all, I would like to point out that
children
person
have to make the selection about their impending
occupation
.
as
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a result
kid
human have
work
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less and less by way of example not finished studying
in
addition
,
kid
person
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have to make the wrong selection
as well as
, studies
while
friends
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,
this
is an accepted fact that instructor ,
in
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father
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mother
be able to make the best
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occupation
. for
this
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kid
human
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have
work
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more and more
also
,
kid
human
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have
future
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to
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the best
as well as
, nurture my
father
and my
mother
make to enjoy and have a good well.
To sum up
, in spite of the fact that
,
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it is hard to make all
people
view
things in the same way, even in the case of everyday
kid
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kids
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person
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people
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have to make the
decision
about their
future
occupation
. Some
people
,
however
,
believes
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believe
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that teachers
in
addition
to my
father
and my
mother
be able to make the best
choice
for their
future
occupation
. some groups way agree that
children
person
have to make the
decision
about their
future
occupation
. despite,
to
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me
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apply
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, I still agree that teachers
in
addition
my
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to my
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father
and my
mother
be able to make the best
choice
for their
future
occupation
. the case and examples mentioned above have supported my point of
view
to the best.
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