People aim to achieve balance between work and other activities of their lives,but few are able to do this. Suggest problems in balancing and some solution for over- coming such problems.

People
wish to maintain both their personal and professional
life
well.
However
, it is not easy for everyone to achieve
work-
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life
balance
in our
life
. The main reason is that most
people
have poor
time
management
skill
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skills
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and a
visable
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viable
visible
solution is
to
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top
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priority
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prioritize
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our daily
activities
and plan
everyday's
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schedules wisely. Most
of
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people
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the people
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do not know how to use their
time
effectively. It is very often that most
people
would love to reach
work-
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a work-life
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life
balance
in their
life
.
However
, due to
work
or other commitments,
people
do not have their spare
time
to enjoy their lives other than
work
. Recent studies have been done by
University
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the University
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of South Australia about how effectively working
people
have to manage their
time
properly, they have interviewed around 500
people
and 70% of the interviewers confirmed that they
work
extra hours, sleep less than 7 hours and no social
life
.
This
is a good example to show that
people
do not have
work
-
life
balance
can be caused by poor
management
skill
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skills
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. Very
smiliar
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similar
studies have
also
been done by Canada, they have
trageted
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targeted
10 busy couples to join a month studies by reviewing their daily
activities
and
then
helped them to plan and prioritise their daily tasks. The result has successfully proved that each of the
couple
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has significantly improved their social
life
and they feel happier of their
life
than before. In conclusion, poor
time
management
skill is a major problem for
people
who are not able to
balance
between their
work
and other
activities
. Social
activities
can be improved by having a good plan and good
time
management
.
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