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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs.

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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of the ages of the Yemen and Italy community in 2000 and forecasting details for 2050 Overall, consider to the Yemen community, half of the proportion has been
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 children in 2000. In 2050, it has been changed and the majority
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 have been shown 15-59 years. Details of Italy the majority
people
 were indicating the age of 15-59 category.
First
 of all, in 1995 local calls was accounted for approximately 72
minutes
. From 1996 and ,1999 many
people
 have been used by domestic lines. It was increased over the time period and
finally
 reached the peak amount and it was almost 90
minutes
.
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, between 2000 and 2002 it was declined by approximately 18
minutes
.
Moreover
, mobile phones have been significantly growing
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time period. In 1999 it was about 12 and in 2008 it was reached around 43
minutes
.
Finally
, local and international calls have been dramatically increased. In 1995 about 34 and from 2002 accounted for about 62
minutes
 in billions. To sum up, the majority of UK
people
 used by local fixed-line compared with other two categories.
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