Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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substantial changes took place with the process of people’ communicating and interacting.
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relationships between individuals and their negative, positive ramifications. I personally believe that negative features outperform positive ones. After several studies of researchers, the
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phone with a lot of cables was created, which gave an opportunity for gentlemen and ladies to deal with urgent matters faster. The availability of being able to keep in touch with others
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increased
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decades later
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when mobile phones were introduced for
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access to
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, respectively in results the speed of communication increased as
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society
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a Wi-Fi and smartphone can connect with each other everywhere at
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by Facetime, Instagram. That kind of progress in engineering
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beneficial and negative aspects. To talk about profits – now we are able to get information from another person with ease.
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, people become more open and social.
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, sometimes people can stay societal only online and continue to drift away from
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discussion. Especially, teenagers prefer to hide their personalities behind the screen, it can be fatal when psychological misleading starts to appear. The years of hard-working development provided us with a perfect tool of interaction with
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positive aspects as getting societal skills,
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of data, but negative matters as losing real interaction or personality have
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much more weight in civilization.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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