Some people think money is one of the most essential factors in promoting hapinness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute towards happiness?

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of
people
in society that believe it is often claimed that
money
is key
of
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happiness
. Others,
however
, think that little
money
can bring happy them too I will agree
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with both
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sides and explain
this
essay. Compelling arguments can be made that
money
plays
great
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role and changes absolutely in human
life
. It is true that big
money
is
significant
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cause in order to
acheaving
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achieving
happiness
.
For example
, every
people
dwell to dream during their
life
which they want some kind of
things
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.
However
, carrying out dream are challenging without much
money
. Provided that
people
earn
much
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money
, they can be happy in
own
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their own
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life
.
In addition
, we need to funds for spending
nesessary
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necessary
scientific works
such
as buying gadgets,
fullfilling
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fulfilling
of materials and etc. Especially, parents ought to
investegate
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investigate
in education in order to children go to the best school. It can be seen that without
money
,
happiness
is very different to attain for them. In
contast
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contrast
, others do not believe that they are dissatisfied without
money
is really important for
happiness
. Nowadays,
great
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share of
people
are
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very busy owing to their works. But many
people
rather care
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their families and kids than earn lots of
money
.
This
condition is
happy
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time for them.
On the other hand
, some adults want to be
volunteer
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during their
life
which do not take
money
.
However
, they always help
to
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others and feel their own
happiness
. In the final analysis despite
th
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the
fact that
money
is one of the many factors to
acheive
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achieve
happiness
but
people
should not forget to spend
money
with their family on things that make them happy.
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