Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Every company has
the
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hierarchy where everyone has
the
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role.
Managers
are determined to make decisions and create a friendly environment for the staff. Some consider that
employees
should be involved in the decision-making process too. I agree that
managers
are
the
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significant part of the staff as they manage with inner and outer circles of the company. They function as the bridge between the head and body of the firm. By having fascinating social skills
managers
communicate with every employee meaning that they tend to balance
work
for everybody. While making
vital
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a vital
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decision
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decisions

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for the business’s sake, the influence of the choice for the
employees
and the finances is estimated by
managers
.
Therefore
, managing people have great problem-solving skills for the negotiations.
On the other hand
,
employees
should have
right
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to be involved in
decision-making
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the decision-making

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process.
Employees
are the main
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workforce

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work force
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workforce

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and every choice will in the
first
place affect them. In my opinion,
managers
might think subjectively and harm the
workers
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worker's
workers'

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job,
consequently
creating conflict in the team.
Managers
with less
work
experience could not make
beneficial
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the beneficial
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decision
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decisions

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for everyone.
Therefore
,
employees
should influence the negotiations about their
work
. To sum up,
managers
are really important in companies environment as their communication skill makes
great
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deal in
decision-making
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the decision-making

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process.
However
, if the decision considers one group of
employees
they should be involved in
this
particular operation.
Therefore
,
managers
and
employees
cooperation will improve the
the
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quality of the decisions.
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