Many adults nowadays prefer spending their free time playing computer games. Why do they do this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays youngsters are wasting their free
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on the computer by playing video games. In my opinion ,spending a lot of moments on the computer is a negative development.
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, playing sport on electronic devices for more
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can be a bad impact on an eye. If they continuously watch at a particular place
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it would affect their eye.
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, in ,past I read an incident of surat that a boy of 10th class was addicted to playing. He was spending his free
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playing games and he spent 5 to 6 hr on electronics due to
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his eyes get a huge impact and he gets spectacles. So I believe that much
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on electronics can
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be harmful.
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, they will not be able to focus at one point. Their mind will be affected by electronic devices. They will develop their
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in computer sport but they will lose their good
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Physical activity, educational
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and many more . Let's take an example, I am a good skater and I know many
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about skates. If I spend much
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on computers
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I will not be able to focus and my body will remain unhealthy because of no physical work and
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would not be able to perform my
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. So I prefer to not be addicted to
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sport. In my conclusion, did technology is increasing day by day it is good but
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become dangerous for our health. Personally, I think that wasting free
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on a videogame is not beneficial.
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