Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person. Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?

Technology has revolutionized each and every phase of life. Presently,some researchers suggest that most
of
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children
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tend to communicate through
the
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social media applications
instead
of facing one to one.
This
essay intends to analyze the reasons that why
people
prefer to
use
online sites for meetings and other purposes with some solutions to reduce
this
tendency. There are several factors responsible for online
meeting
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, the most important of which relate to the sophistication of technology. Due to the advancements in
technology
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it has become easier to communicate and do other works on
internet
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that is
why masses usually
use
networking sites to accomplish their work. As most of the
people
have
personal
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mobile phone, computer and laptop and they find, using technical
gadgets
are convenient as compared to going outside for meetings because they just want to live in their comfort zone. Another one is that
time
, the most precious units of
this
ultramodern society,
which
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can be saved by using network websites. To demonstrate it, in
this
technical era, everyone
busy
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in their life and nobody have enough
time
to meet with
others
so they prefer to
use
social applications
such
as Whatsapp, Instagram ,Facebook and so on, which are helpful to save their
time
as they need not
to
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go anywhere to meet with their loved ones.
Thus
,
people
give preference to
the
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electrical
gadgets
to keep
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with their kith and kin. There are some viable solutions to control
this
trend but some changes are in
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lifestyle needed to be done.
Government
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, the most powerful body of any nation, can support local authorities to build new parks for
public
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, which are likely to encourage young
people
to spend their leisure
time
with their friends and
others
. When they visit
in
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parks, they can refresh their mind and
also
share their thoughts and interest with
others
.
Last
but not least, parents should restrict the
time
of using modern
gadgets
of their children and make them aware about the negative impact of electrical
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. To conclude, as per my above discussion, I opine that
although
today’s generation
give
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preference to online applications for meeting with
others
but
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this
trend can be controlled with the help of awareness and some restrictions on the
use
of electronic
gadgets
.
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  • curate
  • engaging
  • social anxiety
  • digital detox
  • tech-free zones
  • mentorship programs
  • real-world interactions
  • face-to-face settings
  • in-person participation
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