Some people believe that the arts should receive money from the government and big companies. Others feel such spending is a luxury and that it would be better if it were invested in scientific projects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,many
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people think that the
arts
have to get money from their authority or famous companies, but
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believe that it is so wasteful
for
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fund
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the fund
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and it should be considered for
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scientific research and it
is so advantage
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for
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group.
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. In the new
world
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many
of
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people need the new
arts
such
as
:
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creative advertising by
advance
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technology,attractive films by effective sense, innovative decoration and other types of
the
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new businesses for
arts
that these are vital life for every human because in
this
the modern age we are seeing that
pepole
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people
get more and more to need inventive
desgin
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design
for their lives and no longer need
a old or basic
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arts
, so many of artist require money from their authority or enormous companies for developing the
arts
. Despite the fact that
,
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other
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others
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think that the government or well-known business should support scientists for supplement their
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scheme
schemes
because they believe that in the world emerges a new problem or new diseases so should be considered for
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project , if their authorities don't support them , they can not solve
a new issues
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also
they are disability for prevention epidemic diseases and
this
result certainly will be destroyed for in the world. In my opinion,
arts
and sciences are the same very vital for nowadays and both of the topics should be sustained for every human because every person in the new life needs motivated mental for the
arts
,
also
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survive of new diseases or new issues.
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  • preserve heritage
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  • economic measures
  • corporate sponsors
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  • creative industries
  • tourism
  • branding
  • job creation
  • environmental sustainability
  • urgent global issues
  • tangible benefits
  • innovations
  • quality of life
  • industrial advancements
  • diseases
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