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Nowadays many people have an unhealthy diet and do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons behind this trend? How can we encourage these people to live a healthy lifestyle?

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In today’s world, a lot of
people
 do not really take care of themself lately. During the covid 19 and we’re all in
lock down
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lockdown
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besides
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beside
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, all the gym or park where
people
 usually go for exercise and work out have been closed for over 2
years
. And in recent
years
, fast
food
 has become more
usualable
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usually
 for us to eat. One of the main reasons, the pandemic has been with us for over 2
years
 and all the gyms and parks where most
people
 go for a walk or
exercises
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exercise
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 are closing for many
years
 now.
As a result
, many
people
 do not exercise for a long time so their body is not used to exercising anymore even though we can
also
 do some simple works out at home but we can not do it the same as we used to.
Therefore
 exercising at your accommodation will never feel like working out at the gym because
it’s not give
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it does not give
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 you as much motivation as in the gyms.
Moreover
, an unhealthy diet
also
 determines what
food
 you are eating during the day.
For example
 fast
food
such
 as burgers , fries, chicken and chips. Chuck
food
 has a lot of fats and oils to make with so it is very unhealthy but as long as it is easy for
people
 to eat it will always be the most popular
meals
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meal
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 because you can just grab and go. To sum up,clean eating habits have definitely been deteriorating over the
years
 due to more importance being given to the jobs. But citizens should realize the importance of a healthy lifestyle and should try to incorporate it gradually.
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