Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Cultural values are passing
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generations
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to generation in societies.
Although
some
people
think that the born
country
gives less influence to
people
’s attitudes and behaviours, other
people
including myself think that native
contry’s
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cluture
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culture

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plays a vital role in a person’s behaviour. With globalization, the world is becoming smaller.
As a result
,
people
are experiencing different products, ideas from
worlwide
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worldwide
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. Due to
this
reason, some individuals have
forgotton
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the original cultural values of their
country
.
For example
, in Sri Lanka, there are western marriages.
However
,
this
can be seen only in a few places in the
country
while in many other places,
people
give the priority to
traditional
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way of celebrating marriages.
Therefore
, even though globalization could somewhat change
people
’s beliefs, many
people
still stick with their original
cutural
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cultural

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activities. Regarding the definitions of
culture
, it basically depends on the native
country
. A good case in point is,
although
many Indians live in
USA
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, they have not adapted to the western
culture
and they still respect their original cultural values.
Likewise
, in other countries,
people
behave the same way when they live in a foreign
country
, and they do not lose their national identity.
This
can be a reason
of
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strong parental influence because
people
like to work or act like how their
perents
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parents

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,
grand parents
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acted and they
also
need the same way of life their children to follow. In conclusion, while a few
people
have changed their thoughts, attitudes against their native
country
’s
culture
, many other
people
are unwillingly to change their original cultural behaviours. Even though there will be multi-cultural societies, cosmopolitan cities,
people
will follow the
culture
of the original
country
.
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