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Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Cultural values are passing from generation to generation in societies.
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people
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 think that the born
country
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 gives less influence to
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's attitudes and
behaviors
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, other
people
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, including myself, believe that the native
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's
culture
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 plays a vital role in a person's
behavior
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. With globalization, the world is becoming smaller.
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,
people
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 are experiencing different products, ideas from worldwide. Due to
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 reason, some individuals have forgotten the original cultural values of their
country
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.
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, in Sri Lanka, there are western marriages.
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,
this
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 can be seen only in a few places in the
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, while in many other places,
people
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 give priority to the traditional way of celebrating marriages.
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, even though globalization could somewhat change
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's beliefs, many
people
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 still stick with their original cultural activities. Regarding the definitions of
culture
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, it depends on the native
country
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. A good case in point is,
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 many Indians live in the USA, they have not adapted to the western
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, and they still respect their original cultural values.
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, in other countries,
people
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 behave the same way when they live in a foreign
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, and they do not lose their national identity.
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 can be a reason for substantial parental influence because
people
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 like to work or act like their parents,
grand parents
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grandparents
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 acted, and they
also
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 need the same way of life their children follow. In conclusion, while a few
people
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 have changed their thoughts, attitudes against their native
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's
culture
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, many other
people
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 are unwilling to change their original cultural
behaviors
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.
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, even though there will be multi-cultural societies, cosmopolitan cities,
people
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 will follow the
culture
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 of the original
country
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.
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