Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible, while others think that it should not start until 7 years of age.

The overwhelming majority of people have tended to believe that it will be better if official
school
knowledge initiates earlier as possible for younger
children
, though others strongly have followed the idea that
children
should study when their age is 7. I support the people who have suggested attending
school
in the case if they are older than 6.
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an issue that teachers face during
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teaching
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young pupils and the remarkable
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that are attained by kids who are older. More and more people have accepted the offer that going to
school
earlier will be better for their youngsters. It means that being a part of a learning process makes them more responsible and intelligent.
Furthermore
, by early becoming a pupil, kids will have
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youthful graduation. Unfortunately, I am totally against
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the abovementioned suggestion. After all, small
children
are not able to regulate their
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it will disturb the educational procedures. According to the observations, 9 teachers out of 10 have found it difficult to cope. Other parents have supposed that to allow kids to become a student prematurely would be
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mistake.
In other words
, if
children
go to
school
when they perceive the study seriously their marks will
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than expected. I agree with
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because
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growing child will obviously find it interesting and do homework with
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special enthusiasm. As an example, precisely 67% of older
children
can focus on the lesson better than
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ones. To sum up, parents have been divided into 2 when it is related to the acceptable age
to begin
the visiting
school
. I assume that being a pupil as soon as early will build a barrier between knowledge and
children
due to the unreadiness of them to
school
life, while with more independent
children
rating of the education will stonk thanks to Improved skills.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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