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New technologies provided machines which replaced workers to do certain physical jobs and tasks. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is certainly a fact that in the modern era, with advancement in technology various latest equipment tools are flourishing in getting the
work
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 done in less
time
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. The latest machines have more advantages than
workers
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 one of the main advantages is that we can get the
work
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 completed in a fast and more efficient way as compared the physical
work
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. To commence with, with the advancement in machines there is no need to wait for labour to get the job done as
people
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 can hire machines from outside to accomplish the
task
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. Which in turn, saves
time
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 and money because
people
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 don't need to pay extra on manpower wages as the
task
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 can in completed in just
few
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 minutes.
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, adapting highly equipped tools can help to reduce the chances of a load of
work
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.
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, Sometimes it requires a lot of strength and power to shift big rocks in
a hilly areas
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 which can be immensely difficult for
workers
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.
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, due to
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modern technology utilization,
it
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 helps to spread the information instantly.
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, in various multinational ,companies it requires less
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 and effort to boost one message across the globe.
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, if we hire
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 to achieve the
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, it will help to increase the number of
job
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 offers to employees as in a country like India
people
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 are totally dependent on labour
work
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 to keep their livelihood going.
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,
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physically doing any
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also
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 support the health system working.
People
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 will be less likely
pronto
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 diseases which are often a big threat nowadays. To conclude, new technology has
outweigh
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 advantages when compared to manually doing the
task
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 by
workers
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 as it is the reliable, more efficient and fast way in today's
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.
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, it degrades the new employment opportunities for
workers
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.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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