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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible, while others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Whereas some people advocate the belief that
children
 have to be educated in schools earlier, others say it should not be earlier
untill
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until
 the
children
 are 7 years old. It
is disagreed
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 that
children
 should enter schools only at the
age
 of 7. The
essay
 will discuss
the
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both views by considering the impacts of
early
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,
such
 as better data
accepting
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 in younger brains and psychological pressure on
children
. Early entrance of schools is better for
children
 improvement as it appears to be faster while people are young. It comes from the proven fact that
children
's brain structure is more flexible, and compared to elder ones, they can absorb data faster. The
essay
 agrees with
this
 point since the younger the
children
 are, the faster they could adapt to the information receiving and processing. It implies that
children
's capabilities of being taught
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 better when they are younger.
Therefore
,
for instance
, when their grade is 11 and
age
 is 16, student's abilities to study and learn are a lot
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higher than their elder classmates.
On the other hand
, going too early may damage
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 well-being of
children
. Going to school is
stressful
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 situation for
children
 as they are far away from
parents
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 for 7 or more hours, despite their
age
 is only 5 or 6 which pushes them out of
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 zone for a long period, resulting in stress.
This
essay
 disagrees with
this
 viewpoint. One reason for
this
 is the statistics showing that
this
 type of stress for
children
 above 5 is not long enough to damage. The solution
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 from it, telling that
children
 going to school should be at least 5 years old. To
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conclude
, sending
children
 for earlier formal education results in an advantage of flexibility, while being 7 years old in grade 1 may be psychologically safe. The
essay
 advocates the
first
 view as it is more beneficial and could be made safer by considering the child's
age
 before letting him or her enter the educational foundation.
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