Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's most developing and
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world technology make building
construction
easy and rapid. In regards
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, half of
people
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thinks
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, those big skyscrapers in cities should be constructed by the government authorities.
However
, other completely opposite and believed, it is monitoring responsibilities of
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person
who making
building
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a building
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. While I find
this
view of some people justifiable to some extent, I
also
argue that
construction
should be
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controlled
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by
person
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or company who
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that building.
Firstly
, one convincing argument can be made that, government do not have enough time or money to controlled big buildings as they have a lot of work to do.
Additionally
, it means that, if
construction
company spend their money on
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, it is their responsibility to follow some
rules
and
regulation
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about
construction
as well as safety
rules
. Let's take Auckland City
Council
, as an example, They made some
rules
about building
construction
in CBD
such
as certain level of
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the building
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, fire exit and more. Here,
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creative design comes if
individual
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person
takes responsibility for making buildings. On the other side, it is
also
undeniable that
council
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has some special
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which
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just
monitor
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and approve building
structure
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structures
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.
Furthermore
,
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have some specific type of
rules
regarding developments which builder have to follow. The best
revelant
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relevant
instance, Christchurch City
council
, they made some
rules
about high-rise buildings because of
earthquacks
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earthquakes
frequently. So
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all their citizens during evacuation.
Thus
, it can be concluded that
,
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government
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just have
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to make some
rules
that protect and
not
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harmful
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anyone
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.
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, its
fully
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responsibility of that finance company or
person
whoever involving in
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of those kinds of
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building
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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