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New Technology and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Over the past decades, it has been observed that technology has great impacts on the ways of buying and selling. While some aged
people
 prefer traditional shopping ways, I firmly believe that technological advancement leads to purchasing alternatives. To commence the reason,
first
 and foremost is that it is of utmost convenience to online shopping. Purchasing activities, including smartphones and other electronic devices along with the Internet, have turned out to be a new form.
For example
, customers are able to place orders on some e-commerce portals
such
 as Amazon and
Ebay
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eBay
 and those purchased items can be delivered to their home addresses without putting any
efforts
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 to visit stores physically.
Moreover
, a variety of goods, including food, electronic appliances, clothes are all available online nowadays, that meets all the demands of customers
such
 as price, brand and preference. Meanwhile,
people
 can save enormous amounts of time by shopping online
instead
 of commuting to stores on the road.
On the other hand
,
merchants's
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 products can be targeted to a large group of
people
 than in-store shopping. To be more specific,
as
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 the development of
global
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 deployment of
Internet
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the Internet
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 and
high
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 efficiency of shipping systems, distance is no longer a barrier. Sellers can simply market their products through search engines like Google and all the
people
 in the world who can access the network will be potential clients.
As a result
, selling online can easily boost sales. That being said, we cannot deny that many old folks still find
themselves
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 more enjoyable to go to traditional stores.
That is
 attributed to the fact that interacting with sellers has instilled in their buying
behavi
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behaviour
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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