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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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A number of
students
 opt for a gap
year
 prior to entering
university
 for exploring the hobbies or have hands-on
the
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job
 experience, is it fruitful for them or just time killing ,in my ,opinion it actually depends on how exactly they spend their
year
 and I will highlight both the side of the issue in
this
 essay. Now a day trend is going on,that
students
 will take gap your before actually having a
university
 education and each of the
students
 has their own planning for the
year
, how they utilise the precious one
year
 period.some
students
 are farsighted and in ,
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 they start planning for
this
 period when they are in grade 11 or 12th ,start exploring what are the things they want to do ,where they are going to get funding for it with whom they are going to and all other details for an entire
year
.If they are planning to have
job
 experience,start getting recommendations and references so, as to get into it in a timely manner and investigate what actual
job
 duties will be and how that work will enhance their planned
university
 education and what kind of impact it should have in their future
job
 profile after finishing the
university
. In ,contrast the other half of the
students
 randomly take
this
 break without having any preparation for it which just lets them wander here and there ,neither they can focus on their hobby,nor do they have any actual work experience.
This
 group remains in a state of chaos and at the end of the period they don't have anything in hand ,even they can't have any mental or physical break ,just time passed away means total loss of one important
year
 of life. so, in
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conclusion
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 I would like to recommend either should not take the gap or if you want to take please use it wisely means you should have references from that
year
 to show or activities to describe when someone asks what you did in that valuable
year
.
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