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he two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two demonstrated maps demarcate differences in the roads near the city hospital between the years 2007 and 2010. There have been a host of changes in the structure of roads in the 3 years, and these changes are aimed to improve
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traffic congestion and introduce more parking spaces. The hospital lies to the North of the City
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 and earlier there used to be an intersection on the
road
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, but said
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 is now replaced by a roundabout. The roundabout leads to the hospital
road
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; The hospital lies on the end of
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road
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, here too, there existed an intersection which has been replaced by a roundabout which leads to the hospital or continues on the ring
road
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 which borders the hospital on all sides. There existed bus stops on both sides of the hospital
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, but those are replaced now with a dedicated bus station, west of the hospital
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 there
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 existed a mixed
car
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park
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 for the hospital staff
as well as
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 for the public,
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car
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park
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 has been converted to a
car
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park
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 solely limited for the hospital staff and a new public
car
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park
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 has been instated at the east of the hospital along the ring
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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