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Band 4

Would you prefer to stay in one company or change companies at one point in your career life? What are the advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios? Give specific details and examples to support your opinion.

When I think about my own career life, I often think about
carreer
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career
 opportunities at different places and companies, about different roles and responsibilities. Suddenly I
recognized
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 that I could
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definitely
 prefer to change companies,
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 staying in only one for years. If I feel that I can have the bigger opportunities in
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 company and
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 have more interesting challenges that I can deal with for my growth, but my actual job can't give me
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 kind of offer, or if our goals
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 not
matches
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 anymore, my
desicion
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decision
 is always based on myself.
In
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 one hand, I can have
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 improvement area at my collective, - all of us have some kind of "family nest" with warm support,
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loyalty
 and good
knowlege
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knowledge
 about each other - about our strong and weak sides, and here could be a good place where I can start to
growth
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grow
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 can In other hand, the new job can be some kind of "reset button" for my limits, and can open
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 new perspective
of vision
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for
myself
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.
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choose
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choice
also
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laying in
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carries
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 a huge risk, which my brain can
interprate
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interpret
 as a danger, but my mind can force it into a challenge, and my body regulates with adrenaline and
dophamine
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dopamine
 hormones, because new roles, new places and new things
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apply
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all generate a big dose of
fast dophamine
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dopamine
. With
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energy
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energy,
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 I can
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 more, faster or creatively than
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in
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 my previous routine role. With
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nature
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natural
 chemical
boost
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boost,
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 I can
dreaming
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 proudly, set
up myself
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myself up
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 for new ambitions, and
being
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be
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 more productive. So I can
resumed
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 that I
always
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 doing the best for my growth!

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task response
Answer both sides more clearly: staying in one company and changing companies.
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Give one real or simple example for each side.
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Make your opinion very clear in the end and keep it the same all through the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', 'For example', and 'In conclusion'.
coherence and cohesion
Finish ideas fully. Some sentences stop too early or are not complete.
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You give your own opinion clearly: you prefer to change companies.
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You try to discuss both sides of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic paragraph plan with an opening, body ideas, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words to guide the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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