Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The vast majority of people are convinced that authorities should provide different types of financial support for outstanding artists and painters, while others believe that
art
is not as important as other spheres.
This
essay partially agrees with
such
a viewpoint only partially, and
firstly
it will discuss the importance of
art
in society.
Secondly
, it will provide some arguments why the authorities should finance other social spheres rather than
art
. Proponents argue that
governmental
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support can be effective for
development
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the development
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in
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music and
art
. It is evident that if the government will not finance
this
industry, it could lead to a lack of
art
and culture. Undoubtedly, music and
art
is
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one
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of
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the
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important parts of society, so there should be
financing
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the financing
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of these spheres.
For instance
, in
Russia
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the government always supports various
art
galleries and
theaters
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because they are national attractions and millions of people visit them every year.
However
, there are reasons why the financing of music and
art
is not necessary at times by virtue of other most important sectors
such
as medicine, education and
social
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. It is clearly seen that many people are still below the poverty line without medicine and food.
Besides
the importance of
art
and culture, authorities should be dedicated to poverty or public facilities rather than focus on
art
only. To conclude, I firmly believe that financial aid must be given
for
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the culture and creative sector because
this
part is quite important for nations,
however
, I
also
believe that the government should finance and develop other sectors rather than
art
.
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