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Living in the
technology-world
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have changed many aspects of our daily life including
ways
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how we behave towards other
people
around us. While some believe that
technology
offers limitless
for
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communication with their parents, some argue that it causes several domestic issues. In
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I will discuss
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how intelligent-machine development made negative effects on family
relationship
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relationships
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.
Technology
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field is usually known and involved by
small
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a small
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group
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of
people
because
this
cutting-edge thing needs
high
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ability of understanding as well as
an
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specific expertise.
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, scientific background knowledge is vital for applying
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colleges and
further
degrees which is
long
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time journey and followed by
narrow
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career path, related to innovating, researching and improving.
As a result
,
a
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perception of
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artificial
machine
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machines
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is hard to connect and collaborate with
people
who have not experienced it directly. In some developing
country
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, many generations of
people
could not resistant to the
technology
disruption in their traditional life and culture because of the inadequate education standard.
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, parents in several families find it hard to get through the how-to-use of becoming sophisticated devices
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allow them to make a call with
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away
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loved person. And
situation
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come up against the problems
such
as depression, perhaps mental chronic
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when their wise children don't help them and,
moreover
, leave them behind. Lack of
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explanation about using
technology
between different age and knowledge family members eventually leads to
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influence on
household
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the household
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relationship
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relationships
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. In summary,
inappropriate
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introduction of becoming
technology
gave to relatives which required
much capability
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of understanding could make a problematic of family relationship.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Social networking
  • Virtual communication
  • Emotional depth
  • Long-distance connectivity
  • Cultural exchange
  • Social isolation
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Cyberbullying
  • Digital etiquette
  • Social media platforms
  • Professional networking
  • Online communities
  • Marginalized groups
  • Cyber relationships
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