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Nowadays the way many people interact why each other has changed because of technology In what ways has technology affected the types of relation ship people make Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Introduction
Living in the
technology
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 world have changed many aspects of our daily life including the ways how we behave towards other
people
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 around us. While some believe that
technology
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 offers limitless
for
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communication with their parents, some argue that it causes several domestic issues. In
this
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essay
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about
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how intelligent-machine development made negative effects on family relationships.
Body paragraph 1
The
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 field is usually known and involved by
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 group of
people
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 because
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 cutting-edge thing needs
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 ability of understanding as well as
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specific expertise.
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, scientific background knowledge is vital for applying
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technology-related
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 colleges and
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 degrees which is
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 time journey and followed by
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 career path, related to innovating, researching and improving.
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, perception of
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 is hard to connect and collaborate with
people
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 who have not experienced it directly.
Body paragraph 2
In some developing countries, many generations of
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 could not resistant to the
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 disruption in their traditional life and culture because of the inadequate education standard.
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, parents in several families find it hard to get through the how-to-use of becoming sophisticated devices that allow them to make a call with
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away
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 loved person. And situations come up against the problems
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 as depression, perhaps mental chronic conditions when their wise children don't help them and,
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, leave them behind. Lack of good explanation about using
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 between different age and knowledge family members eventually leads to a terrible influence on the household relationships.
Conclusion
In summary, the inappropriate introduction of becoming
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 gave to relatives which required many capabilities of understanding could make a problematic of family relationship.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Social networking
  • Virtual communication
  • Emotional depth
  • Long-distance connectivity
  • Cultural exchange
  • Social isolation
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Cyberbullying
  • Digital etiquette
  • Social media platforms
  • Professional networking
  • Online communities
  • Marginalized groups
  • Cyber relationships
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