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Nowadays, there are a lot of unemployed
people
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with high
university
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degrees
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in many countries in the world. There are several reasons for
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issue and some measures can be taken to tackle
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problem. Several factors cause
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unemployment problem.
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, some companies or offices are looking for a person with
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salary even if they
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have high
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degrees
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and because
people
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with high
university
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degrees
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often
don’t
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accept low salaries, they stay unemployed.
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, today,
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is just a factor of employment and another key factor is
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a skill
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which we cannot find in all high
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students. Some
of
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high
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the high
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graduate
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students just study their lessons to pass the exam and get a good grade but when they
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and go to a job interview, they
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have enough skill to convince the boss to employ them. There are several steps
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can be taken to mitigate
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issue. I believe that teaching future job’s skills
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university
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courses can prepare them better for their future job and
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can affect their employment to have superiority against
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without high
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degrees
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who have skill. Another way is that
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who are
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qualified graduated reduce their expected salary in order to get employed. These days unemployed
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specially
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teenagers just think about earning money so they
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even think about jobs with mean or low income. In conclusion, some steps can be taken to solve
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