Some people like to spend their leisure time after work with co-workers, while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Office
life
is one
of the aspect
Change to a plural noun
aspects
in
our Change preposition
of
life
that took most of our 24 hours in
weekdays. Change preposition
on
Consequently
, it's also
one
of the time
where we spent most of our social Fix the agreement mistake
times
interactions
. This
social interaction could not be limited to only professional interactions
but also
sometime
casual Replace the word
sometimes
interactions
. Some people
allow both of
Change preposition
apply
interactions
intertwined
with each other, but some want to build a wall between them. Change the verb form
to intertwine
This
essay will discuss both of the thinking and also
the advantages and disadvantages which come with them.
For some people
, hanging out with co-workers
is one
of the easiest way
to spend Change to a plural noun
ways
after
Add a hyphen
after-work
work
schedule. Making a plan with people
who are in the same building is practicaly
easy and hustle free. We can pick the place and Correct your spelling
practically
time
to go later in between Correct your spelling
lunchtime
lunch
Correct your spelling
lunchtime
time
or with the small discussion between work
. It's
Change the verb form
It also allows
also
allow us to pick the co-workers
that we think have similar taste or idea of hanging out. Moreover
, spending time
together also
giving us more advantages to get to know our colleagues in the work place
. Correct your spelling
workplace
This
could make our bond with them stronger and therefore
will also
affect our professional relationship in a better way.
Some other people
tend to believe that there must be a separation between work
life
and private life
. I like to think this
as a precaution of a problem that could Change preposition
of this
be appear
when there is a clash between Change the verb form
appear
co-workers
. The more we spent time
with our colleagues, the higher the chance of having some conflicts with them during the interactions
. Thus
, by
limiting our Change preposition
apply
interactions
outside the professional one
with them will give us one
less of a problem in the office. In addition
to that reason, by
Change preposition
apply
having
hang out Add the particle
tohaving
friends
outside Change preposition
with friends
workplace
will Add an article
the workplace
also
give us advantage
by broadening our social networking. Large social networking will give us more valuable Add an article
an advantage
outcome
if we ever need to look Fix the agreement mistake
outcomes
Change preposition
for another
another chances
outside our current Replace the adjective
another chance
other chances
work
life
.
In term
of mixing our professional Fix the agreement mistake
terms
life
and private life
or to separate
them, both have Change the verb form
separating
the
pros and Correct article usage
apply
the
cons. So, we need to think carefully Correct article usage
apply
how
to manage them in order to maximize the advantages that we could get in our daily Change preposition
about how
life
. I personally choose to separate them, because I think the
less conflict with Correct article usage
apply
co-workers
will bring me more peace in my professional life
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