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Many people argu that in order to improve educational quality. High school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it wll lead to losss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both vies and give your Opinion.

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Education
 is the passport to the future and the way of
education
 is changing every day.
However
, there are predominantly two contrasting views where a section of society thinks that in order to upgrade educational quality, High school
students
 are motivated to make remarks or pass judgment on
teachers
 while others emphasize that it will lose respect and discipline in the classroom. In my point of ,view criticism within limits is helpful to improve the educational system. Apparently, various factors make a section of people advocate that for the betterment of educational system old
students
 must pass their good or bad experience and have many reasons to substantiate it.
First
 and foremost is that
last
 era there is big gap appears between new and old generations and old methods of teaching is not applicable to new generation
students
.
Also
, competition in every field is increased a lot. To fulfil that gap it needs someone in between new and old systems who can communicate with authorities and let them know how to bring new changes for improvement . In other ,words high school children help their institutes to improve the quality of
education
 in different aspects.
On the other hand
, some believe that criticism will lead to disrespect and judge their respective supervisors. They do not have enough ability to evaluate their supervisor's performance.
Furthermore
, some
students
 are possessive about their favourite
teachers
 and will not bear any loss talk against them it will cause tension between
students
 as well as
teachers
. In my profound opinion, suggestion in a limited and secret way is good to improve in the
education
 system while we should not ignore the importance of
teachers
 respect and discipline of schools.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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