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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Disorderely
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Disorderly
 school
students
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 impact badly on rest of the
students
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,those
roudy
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rowdy
 and undisciplined
students
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shoud
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should
 be grouped in one batch and provided separate classes for them,I think it's
question
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 of
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the carrier
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 of all concerned
students
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 in
particalar
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particular
class
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 so I would like to go with isolating during escalating
behavior
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 and putting back to
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 when they start acting
normaly
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normally
normal
.
Bahevior
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Behaviour
Bachelor
 of
roudy
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rowdy
students
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 is always unwelcomed by teachers and other
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 it is advisable to take away those disturbing elements when they start
act
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 out ,giving them activities where their energy should be consumed and mind can be diverted, as
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 thing itself provide
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a peaceful
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 atmosphere in
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 while the naughty
students
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 are
exausting
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exhausting
 their temperament,
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 it looks like punishment for troublesome
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 it will
work
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 as redirecting tool. If we totally separate those unruly
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then
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 they don't have
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example
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 of good
behavior
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 and they will start taking those disruptive acts as normal so being tolerant with them, keeping with all the
students
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 will
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 as
boost
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 for changing their attitude towards normal
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 routine.
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 trick will not
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 hundred
percent
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but
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if it will
work
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 on part of the
disorderely
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disorderly
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 it will be
win-win
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 solution for both parties. So ,in summary, I am of an opinion that we should give justified try to
normalies
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normalise
normalises
 their
behavior
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 as they are
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 part of society and going to grow as
a responsible citizens
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responsible citizens
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 in future.
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