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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education #system
Nowadays, seeking
education
 from private schools
become
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 a status symbol of many people.
Moreover
, these households demand
for
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apply
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tax
 exemption
also
.
However
, I strongly disagree with
point
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the point
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 of providing
tax free
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tax-free
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education
 to the high-class society.
This
 essay will examine the topic in detail.
To begin
 with, the
government
 should provide equal
education
 to everyone irrespective of financial background. Perhaps, if someone neglect to get
education
 from
government
 sectors
also
 should pay the
tax
, that can be utilized for improving the quality of
government
 schools, by implementing all the necessary facilities like private schools. To exemplify, it is the responsibility of the governing body to give free
education
 to the public and it is the fault of the system if
this
 has not
met
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. To continue with,
tax
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taxes
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 collected from the population are not only used for supporting
education
 sectors.
However
, it can be used in some other way
also
, for the betterment of the public.
Moreover
, if the
government
 implies
tax free
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education
 to the wealthy people, they will invest that money for their welfare.
However
, the nation's economic
ststus
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status
 will not improve. To summarize, for the economic growth of a country, it is needed to collect
tax
 from all the people in common.
Finally
,
education
 determines the future of an individual. So, it is the responsibility of the
government
 should provide all same way of
learning
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the learning
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 experience.
In addition
, I strongly disagree with the choice of
tax free
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tax-free
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education
to
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the
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apply
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wealthy citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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