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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
Due to
globalisation
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 era, people have many
oppportunities
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opportunities
 to change their
life
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lives
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 in their own way. A few
individuals
 opine that human beings have a lot of options in
this
 contemporary epoch. That essay completely agrees with that notion and will discuss my perspective in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, the
first
choice
 of
individuals
 are
employment
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employed
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 as foreign countries have opened
door
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the door
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 for other nations who want to get
job
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a job
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 there. Due to that, persons go abroad in order to get high wages
,
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 and settle there.
Moreover
, high paid vocations put
positive
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a positive
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 impact on their
lifestlyle
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lifestyle
, which make them high status. As a consequence, they
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their dreams by getting
standard
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a standard
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 lifestyle. To cite an example, a recent survey revealed that several people who settled
in
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overseas have made wealthier than others. To embark upon the viewpoint, the other
choice
 is to adapt
culture
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the culture
a culture
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 of different
religious
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religions
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 and if
individuals
 go to other places in order to live there,
then
 they have
choice
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the choice
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 to accept other traditions, in which they are interested
in
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, rather
bound
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than bound
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 them in one custom. As the result, they get
awre
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aware
 of all rituals, which is beneficial to acquire
knowlegde
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knowledge
. To exemplify, From
Afganistan
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Afghanistan
, several
individuals
 have accepted Indian
religious
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 by taking citizenship in India. To recapitulate, all the
humankinds
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humankind
 have chances to change their life by setting their desire
choice
, but they should
be opt
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 that option which
make
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makes
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 life better than before.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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