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Some people believe that in order to give opportunities to new generations, companies should encourage high level employees who are older than 55 to retire.Do you agree or disagree?

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Development in science and medical fields have drastically improved human health and fitness and
therefore
 , a vast number of
employees
 still choose to continue work rather than retiring at retirement age 55, which in fact directly impacts hiring of young
people
, so some
people
 are of opinion that companies should motivate those senior level to retire, I am not convinced with
this
 idea and provide
further
 details on
this
 topic in
this
 essay. In today's era of technologies and global ,competition everyone wants to keep with their present position and the other half outside of
this
 field wants to enter the field of
job
 especially younger generation as
this
 class of
people
 do not have any
job
-related experience it getting hard for them to hit their target of getting a
job
,
therefore
 a group of
people
 come with an easy solution to enforce top
employees
 to stepdown from the
job
 by offering perks and lure,
this
 type of action in the process take away most experienced and competent workforce so that younger generation who enter in the system does not find anyone to guide and advise when they need. Of ,course we need to support young graduates for
job
 opportunities and for
such
 , the reason I would like to recommend creating assistance or intern positions under those elite
employees
 so that they can prepare
next
-generation trained and with on
job
 experienced individuals .
This
, in fact, will give time to
employees
 of senior-level for planning their retirement,
in addition
,in ,
addition
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this
 will provide ready to takeover workforce for the company,in the other hand win-win for both parties and the employer . In the
,
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end creating additional
job
 positions with keeping valuable seniors for training and directing newer
employees
 will be more beneficial to the company than applying the shortcut of sending high-level
employees
 home with some mind games.
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