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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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An increase in population is a reality, and while we attempt to control the population by various means, it is
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 important for every country to accommodate their citizens. Most metropolitan cities are already overcrowded, and the only way to expand the
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 is to motivate people to settle in nearby villages.
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, Bangalore is one of the most crowded cities and had an explosion in the city population in the
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 decade due to migration from within and outside the state due to the availability of jobs triggered by the advent of information technology companies moving to the city in large numbers during
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 ten to fifteen years. Owning a home in the city had become almost impossible for the middle class and below due to the ever-increasing prices because of heavy demand initiated by spontaneous migration, forcing the government to promote settlement in nearby villages. Provided that the new development and settlement in villages is a fact, the only option left in front of the government is to guide how
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 can be done without destroying the nature and social ecosystems of the countryside.
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, the government can come up with instructions related to the area of
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 of houses in rural areas, promote eco-friendly
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 methodologies in the countryside and other guidance. To conclude, the expansion of
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 in the countryside is necessary to satisfy one of the basic needs of human beings.
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, rather than opposing
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 natural expansion, governments should promote
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 phenomenon but control it with appropriate guidelines.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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