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Some people think that because of email and telephone, communication among people is less personal now than it used to be. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is believed that modern ways of
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 like email and telephone are less personal than talking face-to-face.
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 essay disagrees with the fact as the young generation are adapting to these modes and folk who are less confident in person are able to communicate and express themselves better through them. It is true that most
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 are not able to communicate better through phone or email, as they miss out on visual cues and a lot is lost in translation.
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, the human mind is evolved in
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 a
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 that it is accustomed to seeing faces while talking or listening;
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, it feels natural while conversating physically. Some
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 often trust each other less if they are on a phone or they are emailing, rather than meeting in person.
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 leads to the fact that critical conversations in an organisation are done through in-person meetings rather than through phone calls or emails.
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, youngsters are getting used to telephone
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, since they are born amongst technological advancements. For them, it is indifferent as they are adapted to talk on phones or through text.
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,
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 who are less confident while talking physically prefer talking on phones and they are able to express themselves in a better
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.
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, these ways of
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 are much more accessible and feasible.
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, it helps
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 from different countries to talk without any problems. Sometimes, even if
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 are close, they have no option but to rely on these devices.
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, during a pandemic, they help
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 to connect with their loved ones. To conclude, I disagree that
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 are less personal while communicating through these devices. In fact, I believe that these
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 modes are changing
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’s
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 of conversation including the
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 they express their emotions, as evident from the case of youngsters and
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 who are less confident.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Face-to-face interactions
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Emotional depth
  • Digital communication
  • Convenience
  • Time-efficient
  • Misunderstandings
  • Instant messaging
  • Social media
  • Connected
  • Accessibility
  • Swift decision-making
  • Documentation
  • Formal tone
  • Altered the landscape
  • Emotional connection
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