Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Parents
and
teachers
are both crucial for
children
’s development, some people believe that
parents
should teach
children
to become good
members
of the city,
however
,
this
essay thinks that
school
should be the place to learn it. 
On the one hand, there are two main reasons why
parents
should teach
children
how to behave well.
Parents
have a closer relationship with
children
so they can teach them better than
others
. As
parents
are the closest people to their
children
, they are more willing to listen to
parents
other than
teachers
, so
children
can understand what they should do or should not do in order to become good
members
of society.
Moreover
,
children
stay at home for a longer time than going to
school
,
parents
have more time to teach their
children
how to behave well.
For instance
,
parents
can make their kids aware of bad behaviour anytime, even win normal daily life.
Therefore
children
can learn how to become good citizens.
On the other hand
, there are two reasons why
school
should be the place to teach students to be good
members
of society.
Teachers
in schools are more professional than
parents
, they can provide some professional suggestions on how a child can become better behaved.
For example
,
tutor
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know how to teach students according to their personalities and characteristics, so teenagers can learn faster and better than at home.
Children
can
also
learn how to behave well while cooperating with
others
in schools. There are different people in schools, everyday life in
school
can allow
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a pupil
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pupil
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to learn how to get along with
others
. To cite an example, they can learn to be generous and honest to
others
.
As a result
, they can become
good
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representative
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of
community
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the community
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. To conclude,
although
parents
are closer with
children
,
teachers
at
school
are more professional so they should teach
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the pupil
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pupil
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pupils
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how to be good
members
of
public
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instead
of
parents
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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